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This one has it all. A classic riddle (choice between three possible tunnels), exciting action (Next to zombies, a huge unstoppable horde of little, or not so little critters is my most gruesome monstrous threat), some cool magic and terrible tragedy. It's sad ofcourse, but I feared for a while now, the guy was doomed.
Still sad to see him go, though.
As for Putoko, he's either possessed or it's not him at all, but a demon in disguise. In any case, he is not the messiah, he is a very naughty boy!
I did notice a few minor spelling errors. I'm just listing them here, for your information:

sneak up of them -> sneak up on them?
let out a lengthy sign -> let out a lengthy sigh?

Oh, yes. Just another minor remark. I'm not sure I would describe Kantou as 'panicked' when they first met her. Sure, she was agitated and worried. Who wouldn't be after a fight with a demon? But not really panicked.

Anyway, overall another great chapter, which I enjoyed a lot.
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TheFS Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's sad that Lakor had to go. In the first draft he was killed off for a completely different reason, and not a very good one at that. Like I mentioned before, because I have so much written I couldn't change the beginning novel too much. So.. Lakor had to get kicked out.

Oh, and thanks for the spelling errors, those have been changed =)

As for Kantou, I've changed panicked to unnerved. You're right, she's not panicked really, but she still is a little flustered. A lot of things happened to her right before she bumped into Rantil in Liaport. She's got a lot going on ;)

The big question now is.. what will Putoko do next?
It's not long before they reach the Temple!! Ahhh!
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Walt-Marsters Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to be of help! :)
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